Down Town in Auckland. I like the business traffic in the City.
I love to sleep and snuggle on my smooth blanket.
I love my mate Ieremus an we play passes with the ball.
I love the colour purple it’s so pure and pretty.
This is a record of my learning during the years I was at Pt England School.
I love the way you have worked hard to try and recraft this Marven. You even managed to include some alliteration, well done. I think you could still do some tweaking. Reread it aloud and keep recrafting, that's what great writers do!
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